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Old 25th March 2013   #1
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"Grandma!" my grandson called me with the innocence in his voice. His eyes, oh his eyes, they were beautiful. As beautiful as the moon. They twinkled at me. I looked at him.
He came and sat on my lap. My lap, was the most protective and comfortable place for him. He kept his head on my lap and said,"Grandma! A story?" "Ok, There was a fox.."I was speaking and suddenly when he interrupted and said,"No. I want to hear how you and grandpa met. Please."
I bit my lip and struggled to make my hand reach to the desk. I picked up the picture of my husband, who died in an accident a year ago. I knew he loved me to death and that was all I found crucial enough for me to live in this world..where no one loved me the way he used to.
"Oh my dear. Is my son big enough to hear a boring story with interest?" I said trying to avoid telling him my story.
"Yes,I'm big enough. Please tell!"he said.
His innocent face, just switched my indirect no.. To a direct yes.
"Okay son, here I go...


It was a dark evening. I remember it very nicely. I've the potential to see it still. The wind blew the way it used to like any other normal day, but today it's fragrance was different. It was as sweet as sugar and as bitter as a bitter gourd. Sweet because today I came to know it's importance and bitter because it was too late.
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Old 26th March 2013   #2
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You have a few misspellins, that i'd be happy to point out if you'd like c:!
Try not to put unnecessary spaces, like in your punctuation and etc.
It sounds a rushed, and there's not a lotta detail tbh, but this sounds really interesting! I'm curious as to where this is headed c:
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Old 30th March 2013   #3
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Misspellings ? Please point them out, can't notice them :'(
There is no detail because the story hasn't started yet.
Okay, let me give you a short glance of the story. It's actually about two friends [ Male and Female] who meet after years and then fell in love. Will the very accept that they are in love? Or will continue hiding their feelings..?
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Old 30th March 2013   #4
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Ok.
So was that a prologue?
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Old 30th March 2013   #5
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Okay i'm going to sincerely help you out and do not take it the wrong way
just so you know


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Old 30th March 2013   #6
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Oh NO !
I'm so sorry.
I was like .__.
Woah Shivangi, you ruined the whole story.
Ok I'll edit everything again.. And that postman thingy.. I wrote that willingly.
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Old 31st March 2013   #7
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You changed the whole thing?
Why?
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Old 31st March 2013   #8
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O_o. Is it looking bad. That's the same story..! The start is different.
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Old 31st March 2013   #9
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Oh no!
I prefer it this way, much better start.
Your old start was very misleading.
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Old 31st March 2013   #10
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Already liking this
Continue babygirl c:

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