[mia_so_sassy]

Chapter 1

As i walk into school, I feel drama. When I signed up for this school ,I had no idea I signed up for drama as well.
Today is the first day of a new semester at hamiltion high
school. So that means new classes. I walk into the lunch room for breakfast, and see who i want to see,jacob. Jacob is a boy i have been chrushin on for a whole semester,but he has no idea. All he knows is that we are really good friends. I walk up to him and sits down.
" Hey, getting here early" I say as he now notice me sit down.
"Yea, getting here late is bad for my grades,ya know" he saids, turning towards me.
New semester and he is already worried about grades.
"Yea, I hear ya"
I look at the clock and school is about to start soon. Im so glad we have the first class together, and the third and the fourth. We had sat one day and planned out this semester.
I wish we had all four classes together but there was no way in getting out of my second class.
"Mia" he saids popping me out of my thoughts.
"Huh" I say loooking straight into his hazel eyes.
"The bell just rung, we got to go"
The bell rung alittle earlier than usual. Oh well, better get off to class.
we got to our lockers, then headed for class. We have no idea who is in this class so we were just going to be surprized. When Jabcob and I walk into class together, I look around and see this girl giving me the evil eye. Oh, here we go.
I hate people staring at me, so i stare at her hard and then look away.
"Mia what are you doing".
"nothing"

[kathycatsowner]

Some spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes but that's okay, I think you may have have a good story line but you have developed it enough for me to tell, I could correct it for you and give you examples of how to make it sound better? But its up to you.

Also if you keep going in the start of the story without the characters speaking it makes the book to readers more advanced.

Otherwise, good work

[-sadie-baby-love]

Poor.

[cash1]

I didn't enjoy it,sorry. I see where you're trying to go..but.
The description isn't very well,nor is the dialog.
A few grammar/spelling mistakes.
It's kinda cliche..
But you tried. Props for that.
I suppose I'll stick around and listen a bit more..

[mia_so_sassy]

Bringing a sister down every one isnt perfect some of u made a mistake in yall post

[duskuela]

Not only is this poorly written, but it's a boring story as well. Bravo!