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Diamond sat on the beach staring into the distance.she loved this beach so much she hated to leave and go back home to her parents house.They were always fighting about something ever since the death of her twin Amy.That is why she came here during the summer to stay in the peacefulness of her grandparent's beach house.Her favorite part of the night on the beach was the sunset ,it just seemed to capture you and draw you into it.They were stunning .But this night seemed different to Diamond, like something was about to happen. In the distance Diamond thought she saw the earth move 'impossible ' she thought, but then the whole beach started to turn and swirl in a circle .Diamond tried stand but she got pushed down by the wind.Diamond closed her eyes hoping that when she opened them everything would have stopped moving.Instead she found herself in a green and lush forest,then an acorn fell out of a tree and nocked her out cold. Later when she finally came to, she wasn’t in the forest anymore but a large meadow surrounded by Pixies .Diamond tried to escape the Pixies because she needed thinking time but one particular outsider caught her attention and she ran towards her. The Pixie saw her coming towards her and moved to a different area to escape the vampire coming towards her "I’m Damone now please leave me alone” she said sounding irritated and a little bit frightened. So Diamond walked up a hill into a clearing where nobody was and a plus she could see the ocean.she thought and thought about her strange journey to this extremely strange land.in the distance she noticed a tail flap she got up and walked over to see what it was. Last edited by less_pink_love; 8th July 2008 at 02:46 PM. | |||||||
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Awesome story! Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaasssssssssssssseee eeeeeeeeeeeee write more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
__________________ [LEFT][FONT=Comic Sans MS][SIZE=2][COLOR=black][I]:) A great man once said: There is nothing to fear but fear itself... If only I knew who he was :happysmile:[/I][/COLOR][/SIZE][/FONT][/LEFT] | |||||||
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It's just nothing special. It's too abrupt and, no offence (I'm seriously just trying to be constructive), but it's downright amatuer. And I also hate the contrast between the names of the sisters: Diamond and Amy. They are two horribly pretentious names and in conjunction, it makes me gag. | |||||||
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