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| The next morning Kristi woke up and got dressed in her favorite pair of torn blue jeans and a random shirt. She raced downstairs and scarfed down breakfast as usual before putting on her shoes and heading out the door where she met Brandon so they could walk to school together. "hey Fluffy.." she smiled soflty at him. Brandon walked towards her "What's up special K..get a good night's rest?" when she nodded he smiled softly and they started walking to school. When they arrived at school Kristi automatically found herself searching for someone who could be her prince_of_the_night..."hmm.." Brandon smiled and poked her "Searching for him agian?" when she blushed and nodded he hugged her "Well calm down...we'll find him later..right now you need to be thinking about that test you have in Calculus..." She groaned softly and laughed "Don't remind me.." he laughed as well and sighed "Well..I better get going..before mr. Prince...starts texting you.." "OH YEAH!' she giggled and took out her cell phone and started to text Prince when Brandon kissed her forehead "See ya Special K.." he said before wlaking off. She nodded and text goodmorning princeypoo.. she hit send and after a moment got and you my gorgeous girl.. she laughed softly and sent back miss me? she was at her locker when she got always...i could be standing right beside you and still miss everything about you everytime i blink.. at this she looked around but there were several guys, who were texting, around her. She was texting back when will you let me now who you are... when she hit send someone grabbed her waist and she shrieked. "Hey sexy.." came a gentle growl in her ear, she turned in the persons arms and smiled at Chris "Hey baby.." she said soflty and kissed him. gah!...writers block!....send me ideas..please!...pm mehs...need help!..can't think! Last edited by _lonelyprincess_; 17th October 2009 at 08:30 AM. | |||||||
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Ooc: thank god for anger and drama..now i have a few ideas.. She smiled and stroked his cheek "Wanna walk with me to class?" Chris shoook his head as he was looking over his shoulder "Nah..I have to go do something.." he kissed her gripping her butt and walked away. Kristi sighed standing alone, she realized she had a text from her prince, it read:I see the jerk is around....I don't like him..you should find someone better.. she looked around again but once again there were to many posibilities.She texted back he's actually a nice guy...underneath..sometimes..she sighed as she sent the text and closed her phone putting it back in her pocket and grabbing her bag heading to her first period. She sat in her first period class waiting for the teacher to pass out their test, she got a text from Prince, good luck on your test kristi..she looked around the classroom but noone was texting how did you know about my test? she replied and got an almost imediant reply i just know. ooc: god....inspiration died fast...sorry for the little posts Last edited by _lonelyprincess_; 17th October 2009 at 08:32 AM. | |||||||
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| I read all of it and it's quite good, but I think your posts are quite short; then again, you did say you had writers' block... I hope that you have more inspiration soon | |||||||
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Ooc: hahaha...people always agree with the mom!..haha...you people will definately like the later of this story..i just need enough inspiration to actually get that far..haha..writer's block is killin me!
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It's actually pretty interesting but for a few exceptions: You should start a new line when different people are talking. I know meez doesnt let you indent, but you could at least press enter so it's not as confusing. Example- "Let's go, Wendy." "I'm not Wendy, I'm her daugter Jane." Like that. And you slightly overuse the word 'softly' butother than that, It's quite attenton grabbing. I'll keep an eye on it
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I know..i'm tryin to break the habit of using softly and slighlty alot..haha..and it's a story...you don't always have to press enter everytime someone speaks..if so..stories would be aheck of alot longer
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Sorry it's taking me so long to post again...writers block and busy..so..yeah..just check in on it every now and then and hopefully i'll be able to get writing again
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| Kristi took the test wanting to reply to her prince but not knowing what to reply. She finished before everyone else and sat in her seat reading, or atleast trying to. All she could think about was how the prince knew she had a test. Maybe he had the same class later or something and he knew what period she had it. She snuck her phone out and texted him So can I atleast know what class you have now?... She waited for a response, it took so long she wondered if he hadn't gotten the text and just as she was about to resend it a reply came No...I'm sorry but as I've said, I don't want you to know who I am. She sighed and closed her eyes leaning back in her chair for a moment then replied Okay, I understand..so having fun? the bell rang and she got up grabbing her bag and heading for her locker. She got a text just before Brandon showed up and read it as he tapped on her locker.I will be soon.. she smiled soflty and giggled shutting her phone and putting it in her pocket. Brandon looked at her and rolled his eyes "I know that look..that was from your prince.." Kristi rolled her eyes and punched his arm playfully "Oww! " he laughed and gripped his arm then smiled at her "Come on Special K..lets go to Chemistry..". Kristi shut her locker and they headed to chemistry. OOC: damn writers block..that's all I can think of...god..this sucks Last edited by _lonelyprincess_; 17th October 2009 at 08:32 AM. | |||||||
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