[yuzukiluvv]

characters:
Yuzuki:
Kimiko:
Hideki:


Tokyo Element

part one.

chapter one.

My sleek gray hair swayed slightly in the breeze of the Tokyo bustle. I watched the cars zip by. I held my parasol lightly in my fingers, my soft blue eyes seemed empty.. Like something was missing.. "Hey, You, no loitering, I don't care if you're waiting for anybody." I turned around as a hand touched my shoulder. A middle aged man with a cigarette in his mouth spoke in a gruff voice. "It's after ten, you've been standing here for three hours." I just kept looking at him.

"No, I'm sorry." I finally answered softly. I tucked my umbrella under my arm and walked away, staring at the ground.

"Yuzuki, you know I told you to stop going to that thrift store. He's not gonna come." Kimiko, my sister said in a "don't-you-know" kind of way. Yeah, my name is Yuzuki, I am officially sixteen. Big whoop. This has been one of the most miserable years of my life.. Not only was I a disappointment, and no match for my sister, but my big brother, Ryou, die the previous year. I never did get over that. By the way.. He meant the world to me. "Hellloooo?" Kimiko said in my ear, "Answer me! You know I hate being ignored!" She grunted and stepped back, crossing her arms.

My sister was beautiful. Tall, elegant, perfect brown curls, brown eyes, perfect. Every guys dream. I, "just happened to be born weird". That's what everybody says. I don't believe that. I know god chose me to be this way. I had light stone gray hair color. What was I old? I has blue eyes, which I hated dearly. I always wanted brown eyes and blond hair. Like a regular person. Jeez was that too much to ask.. Brother was really the only one who understood..

"You don't know that...." I mumbled. "Yuzuki! He's DEAD!" Kimiko grabbed my arm and shouted in my face. I felt the tears coming.. As usual, I held it in, hoping that I wouldn't cry again..
Too late... The tears spilled out "SHUT UP!!!" I cried, falling to my knees. Kimiko let go of my arm and stared down at me. "Typical." She walked away and took a sip of her coffee.

I found myself on my futon crying again, as usual. This happened on a regular basis, No big deal. My mother, my sister, my father and I live in the outskirts of Tokyo. A kind of old fashioned, small but kinda big traditional japanese, no door "come on in" kinda house. That's the thing I hate. Paper doors. Slide, Slide. All day. No privacy. These things need locks.. "He will come.. He will come..." I whispered this, over and over again. It helped me settle down..

[yuzukiluvv]

Hope you like it....
Jeez. Normally I wouldn't write anything like this..
>.<

[zayleus]

I reallyreallyreally like this piece! It's imaginative, fresh and well-written. I'm definitely going to try my hardest to keep up with your story.
However, one thing I'd like to point out is that you have a bad habit of starting practically every sentence with the word "I". Try to mix it around a little; it'll be a fun challenge.

[yuzukiluvv]

I know. I noticed it too.
Gasp Did it again. OH NOEZ
yay. Thanks. ;o

[yuzukiluvv]

With the sun shining through the windows, my eyes opened slowly. Again, I've cried myself to sleep. Not any big surprise either, no more uncommon then the crying. I took in a deep sigh as my uniform was set out on my futon, folded and perfect. "YUZUKI!" Kimiko was outside my paper door, screaming as usual. The door slid open with a thud. "Your gonna be late! "Don't skip school and go to that thrift store!" This was officially her catch phrase. She says this every time I leave for school ever since I started hanging out in front of that rusty old thrift store. I can't really help it.. Something about it reminds me of Ryou's old fashion..
"Kimiko.. You know I never skip school.." I muttered. " BUT- Today is a NEW day! Now get dressed!" I took off my sleeping gown slowly and put on the school skirt and top. I grabbed my socks and uniform shoes slowly and put them on. With a click, I closed my bag and started down the hall. Once at school I walked alone, slowly staring at the floor. I sighed as all that was on my mind was Ryou.. And that thrift store..
"Bing, Bing, Bing!!" The school tower rung loudly I picked up my pace slowly as I entered the entrance hall. Teenagers bustled by, left and right as I squirmed slowly through the crowd. Suddenly, I felt a hard chest smash my face. I fell backwards with a whimper. On arm, blood ran down it slowly where the clip of my schoolbag practically assaulted me as I fell. I whimpered again as I looked up at the mystery boulder.
A tall, lean boy stared down at me, he had snow white hair and rusty yellow eyes. He grabbed my elbow carefully and set me on my feet. "Watch where you're going." The boy spoke quietly. We were the only ones in the hall. Strange, the second bell hasn't even rang yet. Maybe I missed it..? I put my head down quickly, embarrassed and ran down the hall, tears in my eyes.
OH MY GOD! I couldn't even pick myself up! I bet I looked like a total idiot!
I burst into the sunlight as I escaped the doors of that wretched school. I looked up at the window, the mystery boy was staring down at me from the four story building, with eyes still full of tears, I turned away once again.

[yuzukiluvv]

Oops, posted twice
Don't read second one.

[zayleus]

Click "Edit" on that post and you can delete it.

[yuzukiluvv]

Oh hehe

[spork_ur_i_out2]

Ha, last time I tried to write a Tokyo based story it was nowhere near as well done as this
Ilook forward to more ^_^

[glassheartsbreak]

Okay, something I would like to point out,

"My blue eyes seemed empty.. Like something was missing."


How would she know what her eyes looked like if she wasn't staring into a mirror? And what's with the two little dots? A lot of people do that, it's not correct.

Three dots!

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