[obese]

Bump.

[froggyxablaze]

I WANT MORE.
munch munch munch.

[obese]

Yup, I think that out of all of your pieces Indy, this is my favourite.

//Edit:

"Carl’s stomach turned a bit and he was very relieved"

For some reason, the "very" just didn't seem to fit well while I was reading, eh, maybe it is just me.

[ohdoctordie]

For serious? Stoked.

All the Hans Christian Andersen I've been reading lately has brainwashed me into using "very" quite a bit. ...And "quite." I think it's because I read his stories in a British accent, so it kind of spills over into my writing.

[froggyxablaze]

I love it. Please continue.
:3

//tis waiting.

[glassheartsbreak]

Okay, this is absolutely amazing.

Holy mother of Mary, I love it.

Favorite story on here, EVER. And it's only the second update.

Dude, that last sentence totally left me breathless.

I'm like, in awe.

Congratulations, you have a gift.

[obese]

Sadly yes, other than that though: pure perfection.

Indy, you are easily one of the best writer's on this site.

//don't stoot me.// I've never heard of him, looks like I have someone new to check out.

[ohdoctordie]

Glass:

Dylan: Danish author who wrote The Little Mermaid, The Snow Queen, Thumbelina, The Red Shoes, The Little Match Girl, The Ugly Ducking, and my new favorite, The Nightingale. :} If you enter the contest Marti and I are supposed to do sometime soon (shhhh!), there'll be a good chance of you having to do your own version of one of those.

[thc67]

Well since everybody already told you how great you are, I'll just say continue...

[ohdoctordie]

You could tell me what I could improve on? Because I know this is far from perfect.