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Old 1st October 2009   #21 (permalink)
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Old 2nd October 2009   #22 (permalink)
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I WANT MORE.
munch munch munch.
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Old 2nd October 2009   #23 (permalink)
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Yup, I think that out of all of your pieces Indy, this is my favourite.

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"Carl’s stomach turned a bit and he was very relieved"

For some reason, the "very" just didn't seem to fit well while I was reading, eh, maybe it is just me.
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For serious? Stoked.

All the Hans Christian Andersen I've been reading lately has brainwashed me into using "very" quite a bit. ...And "quite." I think it's because I read his stories in a British accent, so it kind of spills over into my writing.
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I love it. Please continue.
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Okay, this is absolutely amazing.

Holy mother of Mary, I love it.

Favorite story on here, EVER. And it's only the second update.

Dude, that last sentence totally left me breathless.

I'm like, in awe.

Congratulations, you have a gift.
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Old 3rd October 2009   #27 (permalink)
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Sadly yes, other than that though: pure perfection.

Indy, you are easily one of the best writer's on this site.

//don't stoot me.// I've never heard of him, looks like I have someone new to check out.
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Old 3rd October 2009   #28 (permalink)
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Glass:

Dylan: Danish author who wrote The Little Mermaid, The Snow Queen, Thumbelina, The Red Shoes, The Little Match Girl, The Ugly Ducking, and my new favorite, The Nightingale. :} If you enter the contest Marti and I are supposed to do sometime soon (shhhh!), there'll be a good chance of you having to do your own version of one of those.
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Well since everybody already told you how great you are, I'll just say continue...
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You could tell me what I could improve on? Because I know this is far from perfect.
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