[thc67]

ohdoctordie wrote: You could tell me what I could improve on? Because I know this is far from perfect.

Yeah, if I look for something that you could improve on, then you'll probably hold a grudge. If I try really hard, I can always find something to pick on.

[ohdoctordie]

Why would I hold a grudge if you're helping me improve my writing? I mean, unless you're unintelligent or rude about it, it's not a bad thing. I don't hate you for pointing out that Juliet suddenly believing Clyde was a vampire was unrealistic. Just give me something I can work with.

[thc67]

Lol, you remember that post. Okay, but remember that I'm rereading to really see what feels awkward in the writing.

[glassheartsbreak]

I can't find any flaws. Haha.

But it's kind of hard to tell what's going on right about now.

All I can tell is this guy is going in to see this girl who is a very bad bad person?
That's all I know, so it's kind of confusing at this point, but I'm sure it will get better.

[obese]

Wait, so he wrote classics and I never knew his name?
Well, I feel incredibly stupid right now.

[ohdoctordie]

Glass: That'll definitely be clarified pretty soon. Thanks for letting me know.

Dylan: Better late than never. His stories were kind of the catalyst for me dropping RRH. Beautiful, beautiful storytelling, gahh.

[obese]

Touché Indy, touché

[thc67]

The only thing I can see, that I dislike, is there really isn't much description between the prisoner and the mystery man. I'm assuming he is probably a priest. Other than that it's good. Everything seems to be realistic. I really couldn't find much to pick on.

[obese]

Just gonna give this a little bump.

[aubrey_dollface]

Don't let this dieeee, Indy. D;